Bird Poem
birds in the trees
loving the breeze
fluffing their feathers
in the beautiful weather
while the hawk spies at them
sitting on their nest
having a rest
protecting their chicks
so nothing eats them
off they fly
to get some kai
they have to be quick
to get back to their chicks
drop in a worm
so their little ones eat
mother bird spreads her wings
she cover her babies
snug safe and sound
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Hi Lacey your poem is lovely and I enjoyed reading it. Maybe next time you could use punctuation. Ka pai Lacey! Ms Peters
ReplyDeleteWow Lacey, your writing has certainly come on in the last 18 months. I could really picture what was happening in your Bird Poem. Well done.
ReplyDeleteHey Lacey great effort with your poem. Keep up the great work! look forward to seeing more from you :)
ReplyDeleteI really love this poem, it flowed really nicely, awesome job Lacey
ReplyDeleteHi Lacey, It's Lucy from Paroa School
ReplyDeleteThis is an awesome poem. I like how it rhymes. How did you come up with the idea of writing a poem about birds? To be BTB(Better Than Before) you could double check all your puntation.
Lucy
Hello Lacey! How are you? I hope you are having a great day! This poem is amazing! How long did this take you to make? Did you have any help from anyone? Keep up the good work from Eden.
ReplyDeleteHi Lacey, My name is Yazmin from Paroa School.
ReplyDeleteI really like this poem because it rhymes and I love birds they are on of my favourite animals! We had to do something like this last year at school with all sorts of poems!
What is your favourite type of poem to write?
Next time you could Put a caption on it so we know why you did it?
And also try to make it a little shorter
Your Friend Yazmin
Hello Lacey, I'm Miro G from Paroa School.
ReplyDeleteThis is a cool poem, I like the idea.
Why did you make this type of poem?
Miro G.
Hi Lacey Its Jaymee from pcs
ReplyDeleteI love your bird poem it is amazing.